Hi Kombizz,
This is not a pciture I'd get on the phone tp tell friends they must see!
Abstract art is sometimes tough to project. "My Desire!" is not digested by my senses. I could of course say it's no good, but that is not correct. It is not "good", but not "no good"! It is perhaps the beginning of some idea or a little beyond it, I can't tell, but I'm interested in what makes some images work to look at your picture further. This picture is flat, but maybe this is your intent and you're satisfied with it. If so ignore my comments as who cares if I don't "get it"! Art has to be first and foremost for the experience of the artist.
To me, the white background of the page and the low contrast and pale colors make the image non-striking. So I've altered the contrast of your image and punched it up and then placed it on a gray background.
Asher